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Once, I found a letter…

hand written letter

Today’s Prompt: You stumble upon a random letter on the path. You read it. It affects you deeply, and you wish it could be returned to the person to which it’s addressed. Write a story about this encounter.

Today’s twist: Approach this post in as few words as possible.

While, eating my lunch, I cast him a quick look. Sitting in that lonely corner of the cafe, that man in his late thirties was shedding tears.

I felt a strange urge to console him. But, before I could say anything, he stood up and went away. I too, paid my bill and headed for the door.

Passing by his table, I saw a folded paper. Out of curiosity, I opened it. It was a letter

Dear Brother,

… We are enjoying spring season here. The leaves are green and the sun is shining brightly. Everything is looking beautiful…

Mother is missing you a lot. Do write to us.

Your loving sister

The dampness of letter revealed the agony of a man. Despite living among the luxuries of life, the man was missing his homeland and the pale yellow sun of a cold winter was reminding him of all the colors of life which he had left behind.

I folded the paper and put it carefully in my pocket. I wanted to give it back to him. After all, it was his most prized possession.

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21 thoughts on “Once, I found a letter…”

  3. This is such an amazing piece of writing. your narrative structure is amazing, the steady flow of the piece is good, and the way that you have connected the beginning, middle, and ending is very well done. Especially since I was entertained the whole way through reading, and that the descriptions you used were fantastic! I could imagine the environment, the man, where he had come from, so much from just a few short sentences.
    This line here,’ Despite of living among the luxuries of life,’ is where I have a bit of a reading issue. While grammatically it makes sense, it doesn’t read that easily. Maybe if you took of away it would be easier to read. Hope this helps.

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    1. Thank you lucy for such a detail analysis. English is my second language. So, sometimes it troubles me.

      Thank you for pointing out this line. Will you please explain it a little bit more?

      Regards

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      1. Wow I had no idea you were a second language speaker, you write so well!

        The line you said despite of living… It does make sense, however it does flow that well – in everyday speech when you are chatting to a friend it sounds okay since your speech will not be perfect as it is not rehearsed. However, one tends to write differently since you have a chance to edit your work, and make the grammar more easily readable. So in this case “despite of”, could simply be replaced with “despite” because it is easier to read and flows better.

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          1. I am so glad I could help. I was worried I made no sense at all! I am following your blog too, and it is so nice to meet you too! 🙂 Looking forward to tomorrow’s post 🙂

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      1. Just want to know, is this what you experienced??? If yes, then my feelings for that person… If not, then you have a brilliant skill of writing stories and want you to write more 🙂 I loved it!! 🙂

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