People in the town used to quote their example. Their friendship was unique. They were known to risk their lives for each other.
Then, like the colors of the morning sun which slowly melts in a daylight, their childhood plant gradually turned into a youthful tree.
With passionate hearts and different perspectives, they chose unique paths in their lives. The money came in abundance and love and care disappeared.The serpent of wealth played a fatal trick and the poisonous venom of jealousy proved lethal.
One day, people of the town woke up to find their friendship tree was withered away.
“Mission accomplished!” the hoarse voice of monster of hatred announced
A thunderous applause from junior members caused the night to shiver with fear.
Deep, in a wood, the bird took its last breath.
Its final words were
“Once, in a warm sunshine they used to play. Long ago, they love each other!”
This post is a response to Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. The word count is 153.
Thankyou, Priceless Joy for hosting this event 🙂
Don’t know how I missed this first time round.
It is very well written.
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Thanks a lot Chioma,
That was my second or third time that I wrote this story.Believe me I didn’t read this story again 🙂
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loved how this had a fairy tale like magic to it! beautifully written
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Thank you for such kind words of appreciation 🙂
I’m glad that you find some fairy tale magic here 🙂
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You are most welcome 🙂
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Bravo!!! You weaved magic with your words, they captured my attention throughout the entirety of this story, I love the flow of this. Really, this is one of my favorites 🙂
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Thank you so much Ameena!!!
These kind words of appreciation made me feel honored 🙂
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It really motivates me to write more and better!!!
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Excellent story and well written. Times change, people change and we would like for it to always be for the better, but that doesn’t happen for everyone. There are many obstacles that get in our way and we need to work at making things come out for the better. Greed and hate play a major role in destruction of our society.
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Thanks for your kind feedback and well said. I find great analysis of the whole scenario in your comnent!!!
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I like to drop by occasionally and leave personal messages for the participants of FFfAW challenge. I truly enjoy reading your stories each week and I know the others do as well. Thank you so much for your continued participation, friendship and loyalty!
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And, thank you so much for you continuous ksupport here!!!
I have a question. Can i ask for specific type of feedback on my post here in FFfAW?
Do
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Yes! Of course you can.
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Very nice imagery and metaphor. I especially liked the sentence, “The serpent of wealth played a fatal trick and the poisonous venom of jealousy proved lethal.” 🙂
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You had some really nice descriptions.
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Well, I’m glad that you find the description nice here 🙂
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A lovely story with an element of sadness, and nicely told. I love the comparison between the wonderful childhood days, filled with friendship and love, became warped during the passing years. Wealth and greed changed their perspectives on life. I liked how you showed that change on the friendship tree.
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Thank you for your kind feedback!
Yes, there is a feeling of sadness here. I guess, the picture conveys the message of friendship here.
You are right, the colors of childhood get fade with passing years and this photograph clearly depicts the innocent days of childhood 🙂
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A very dark tale with a lesson, written very creatively!
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Yes,
Onchi, you are right!
There is a feeling of sadness here. And, thank you for finding it “creative” 🙂
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This reads like a modern fable. Well done!
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Thanks Sonya!
Glad to discover your blog and I’m happy that you like reading my story 🙂
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Just wonderful!
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Wonderful story, magic and mystery! Loved it
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Many thanks!
I’m happy you find it interesting 🙂
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Honest but beautiful 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
I’m glad that you like reading it!
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Very true of today’s world. You wove your message beautifully into your story.
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Thank you for your kind words!
You are right! this is very true of today’s world.
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great story
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Thank you 🙂
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Such a nice one! And so much true with respect to what we see today!
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Thank you for your kind comment!!
You are absolutely right this stands true with respect to what we see today.
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You’ve intricately woven a great story that transcends time and possesses hard lessons and trials in life. Like many things, friendships can blossom and wither. Some things we can control; some we can’t. Very sad yet true.
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Well said!
The smiling faces of children in picture truly reflects the innocence of childhood. It is a time when the feelings of love and care prevailed everywhere.
You are right!
The tree of friendship can blossom and wither.
Thank you for your valuable feedback.
I appreciate it 🙂
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An excellent story but very sad because it is so often true to life for some people. A great lesson can be learned from this story Nature Lover.
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The picture shows the carefree moments of childhood.
I guess , these innocent thoughts and sincere feelings of love for each other sometimes disappear with time.
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Yes, it certainly does! 🙂
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Sadly, they probably do. Life changes people as they mature.
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Good story
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