Story of a dream house

Standing beside the window, Brian was looking at the calm sea.

His beloved wife always wanted to have this home. There was a time when he was in a position to fulfill her dream but fate decided to take their test.

Brian’s brother got in trouble and needed money. Though, teary black eyes of Melissa made him sad, Brian remained stick to his decision.

The result of his pure intentions was sweet. After some years of struggle, Brian finally purchased that beautiful house.

He was still absorbed in his thoughts when he felt her presence behind him

Wearing white pull over, Melissa was looking fresh and attractive

What are you thinking dear?” she asked

Gently pressing her soft hands he replied

I was thinking about you. Are you happy?

She placed her head on his shoulder and said, “I’m more than happy”.

Up in the sky the warm sun smiled behind the clouds, while embracing each other, they both looked contented.

(162 words)


This post is a response to Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. Thank you Priceless joy for this opportunity 🙂

And, thank you Louise for this wonderful picture.

Well, it’s a year of writing on word press (It was in September last year that I started to post regularly).

These days, I’m trying to participate in flash fiction challenges. My sister think that there is darkness in my stories. So, at times I think that my readers will get tired of reading them 🙂

I actually enjoy reading short stories. The list of my favorite short stories is long but one of my favorite is Vladimir’s “Signs and Symbols” and “Happy Prince” is always close to my heart.

Dear reader, thank you for your patience in reading my posts.Your presence means a lot to me 🙂

15 thoughts on “Story of a dream house

    1. Thanks Louise, you are not evil but you are clever. (may be a plot hole here 🙂 )
      The tone of story and then “He felt her presence behind him” can be misleading 🙂
      You say it’s a beautiful story, it makes me smile 🙂

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  1. That was a nice one.

    And i think its good to switch between writing stories between dark and bright sides. I have faced that. Once we start writing dark side stories, its goes for a while and feels fun. Than some how it automatically switches to bright one and the cycle continues.

    This was a nice read.

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  2. Such a calm, peaceful mood in this story. It is a wonderful story with a happy ending! (also, I would removed the “but” in the third paragraph). Thank you for participating in Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge. 🙂

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